Can you rate my original anime?Whats wrong?!


Question: and my Elfen Lied pic. *free hand*
Tell me what you think is wrong I promise I wont cry...much. xD
Don't ask about the chess pieces I saw them at my table so I drew them in for no reason.

http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q172/...

http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q172/...


Answers: and my Elfen Lied pic. *free hand*
Tell me what you think is wrong I promise I wont cry...much. xD
Don't ask about the chess pieces I saw them at my table so I drew them in for no reason.

http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q172/...

http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q172/...

I can see the first figure is meant to be slouched, looking down. Disappear the neck, shrink the chin area and over lap the lower lip with the upper lip as it would be hidden when the head is bent down.
Study your own face in a mirror in the pose or have a friend pose for you to get ideas on how you might draw that.
You could exaggerate the pose by havin a few strands of hair dangle straight down from the temples, or use dangling jewlery (earrings, head and hair jewlery).
Make arms longer by giving more bend in the elbow. Maybe bring one elbow out to the side a bit. That will also break the symmetry of the figure which is the first thing that detracts from the image.
When you slouch with your hands in your pockets it brings your shoulders closer to your waist, and your elbows bend more deeply, and foreams appear longer.
Try the pose in a mirror, standing up straight and slouch slowly. Watch the changes.

As for Elfin, the only thing that really sticks out is just the division between the frist and second finger. I like the expression in the hand and the long slenderness. But you may have to reposistion the forefiner a little to correct this. Trace the forefiger you have on another paper, darken the line and move it under the drawing, until you can see where exactly it looks right, and trace it there.
Study the negative space between your own forefinger and thumb. Negative space is the space around your subject. It has a shape, and artists use negative space to help define the subject. It is also a space that is easier to shape sometimes, because your brain gives it names, like aspen leaf shape or egg shape or triangle shape. Try it, I find it helps when I'm overworking my eraser trying to get the proportions down.

Trace is good. It helps work out position. Your brain will learn and you will need to use it less. Your tracing your own work not someone elses. Thats allowable.
Triple edit, Hah!

its alright, you could improve the shoulders and use a better pencil preferably a darker one other then that its good.

Theyre prety good, I think youre great in your details, but it needs to be more proportionate. They look akward and scrunched up....but its very good over all!!!

well..they look weird especially the guy it seems he doesnt have a neck lol, but dont worry im pretty sure youll get better.....if i did you could so do it?

i think it's good but your drawing is a little too flat, you better concentrate on the details of your drawing and eventually you'll get better. Way to go!



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