Im making a Manga Comic in graphics that is fairly like naruto......?!
Question: Im making a Manga Comic in graphics that is fairly like naruto!.!.!.!.!.!.!?
Can you give criticism, corrections and maybe even say how good it is and how can i make improvements on my storyline;
thx in advance;
My storyline for my Manga comic
Main story:
There are 3 realms, one realm (The Dark sky Realm) controlled by two allied villages(ShiroiSora sato
( WhiteSky village) and the Kuraikaze sato ( DarkWind Village)), and the other realm(The Red Dragon realm)
controlled by another two allied villages(KageRyuu sato (ShadowDragon Village) and the AkaiTsuki sato (RedMoon village)), but there was the other realm ,which is empty, controlled by many strong creatures and demonic monsters,
it was once a large peaceful village but was torn to pieces as the two other realms worked together to take over the realm!.
The two realms(the dark sky realm and the Red Dragon realm) fought the unnamed realm , they took over the realm after a long battle,
but the dark sky realm was plotting elsewhere, the dark sky realm betrayed the Red dragon Realm killing many of their elite ninjas
and fought them for over 10 years in the realm but neither realms managed to take over the realm for themselves so they gave up ,
retreating back to their own realms and left the unnamed realm torn to pieces!.
Many families and ninjas died during the battle , the battle was never spoke of again!.!.!.!.
The DarkSky Realm
Kuraikaze sato ( DarkWind Village)
ShiroiSora sato ( WhiteSky village)
The RedDragon Realm
KageRyuu sato ( ShadowDragon Village)
AkaiTsuki (RedMoon village)Www@Enter-QA@Com
thx in advance;
My storyline for my Manga comic
Main story:
There are 3 realms, one realm (The Dark sky Realm) controlled by two allied villages(ShiroiSora sato
( WhiteSky village) and the Kuraikaze sato ( DarkWind Village)), and the other realm(The Red Dragon realm)
controlled by another two allied villages(KageRyuu sato (ShadowDragon Village) and the AkaiTsuki sato (RedMoon village)), but there was the other realm ,which is empty, controlled by many strong creatures and demonic monsters,
it was once a large peaceful village but was torn to pieces as the two other realms worked together to take over the realm!.
The two realms(the dark sky realm and the Red Dragon realm) fought the unnamed realm , they took over the realm after a long battle,
but the dark sky realm was plotting elsewhere, the dark sky realm betrayed the Red dragon Realm killing many of their elite ninjas
and fought them for over 10 years in the realm but neither realms managed to take over the realm for themselves so they gave up ,
retreating back to their own realms and left the unnamed realm torn to pieces!.
Many families and ninjas died during the battle , the battle was never spoke of again!.!.!.!.
The DarkSky Realm
Kuraikaze sato ( DarkWind Village)
ShiroiSora sato ( WhiteSky village)
The RedDragon Realm
KageRyuu sato ( ShadowDragon Village)
AkaiTsuki (RedMoon village)Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
I liked the story, and you could name the unnamed realm, to something like "Abandoned Realm", and put the story about why it was abandoned in the middle of the main story, like something he heard and that made him discover the battle, that he didn't know it existed because he was too young to remeber!. And maybe you could put this weird rivalry between the two realms, and only the old people know why it exists!.
I hope i helped, and sorry about any grammar mistakes, engish isn't my first language!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
I hope i helped, and sorry about any grammar mistakes, engish isn't my first language!.Www@Enter-QA@Com