Please read this and tell me what you honestly think and suggestions!?!


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Please read this and tell me what you honestly think and suggestions!?

When I look in the mirror, what do I see?
Just another teenage girl staring back at me.
On the outside she is confident, cool, and collected.
But on the inside she's freaking out,
Afraid she'll be rejected.
She is self-conscience and unsure,
All she wants is a her that is pure.
Free from the pain and the worrying,
Able to easily overcome anything.
She struggles to break free
All the time wondering,' Is that girl really me?
She cries as she lets out a yell,
Trying to escape from inside her own hell.
She looks hard into her own eyes and she finds,
That underneath it all, she's the way she wants to be.
Out into the world for another one of her raging fights.
But every day when the days turn to nights,
She'll climb up the stair,
Look real hard,
And see herself standing there.


I wrote this and really want to know if it is any good, any ideas for a good title?


Answers:

Breaking the glass....i thought would be a good title because it seems that is what you are wanting to do...break the mirror and come out strong...
keep working...i liked the poem but thought as you get into writing you may come back to it and take some lines out and compress it for something more stricking...it all comes with practice and revamping...but it is a very good start! don't give up on it...


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