What do u think of this song? i wrote it so be honest.?!
Question: Nobody Knows
(chorus)
nobody knows the pain that I feel
hiding behind a certain
in a reality thats too real
knowing hiding won't help
and the scars won't heal
nobody knows the hurt
I will reveal
(verse)
I had a bad day today
everything is messed up
and nothings going my way
I can't seem to clear my head
life is too confusing
I'm sick of people and everything they've said
(chorus)
nobody knows the pain that i feel
........etc
(verse)
life sucks and theres nowhere to go
my guitars' not playin
no ones' at home
I think I'll be okay
if i run like hell
to get away
my world is fallin apart
we're all gonna die
before it starts
I can't help the anger i've shown
but its cuz people won't shut up
they won't leave me alone
(chorus)
nobody know the pain that i feel
.......etc
(verse)
nobody knows i'm blind
I can't see in front of me
or behind
I'm not sure were i'm going
I'm not sure were i've been
but time is running out (pause)
time is up, now i'm fallin again
(no room 4 hole song)
Answers: Nobody Knows
(chorus)
nobody knows the pain that I feel
hiding behind a certain
in a reality thats too real
knowing hiding won't help
and the scars won't heal
nobody knows the hurt
I will reveal
(verse)
I had a bad day today
everything is messed up
and nothings going my way
I can't seem to clear my head
life is too confusing
I'm sick of people and everything they've said
(chorus)
nobody knows the pain that i feel
........etc
(verse)
life sucks and theres nowhere to go
my guitars' not playin
no ones' at home
I think I'll be okay
if i run like hell
to get away
my world is fallin apart
we're all gonna die
before it starts
I can't help the anger i've shown
but its cuz people won't shut up
they won't leave me alone
(chorus)
nobody know the pain that i feel
.......etc
(verse)
nobody knows i'm blind
I can't see in front of me
or behind
I'm not sure were i'm going
I'm not sure were i've been
but time is running out (pause)
time is up, now i'm fallin again
(no room 4 hole song)
I like it...i feel this song because sometimes i think that i feel like this too....like right now this song mirrors my sentiments....good job in capturing those emotions and feelings in a song!!
sounds like something a 10 year old boy wrote when he was bored.
it sounds like ur on the verge of suicide and that scares me...a little to dark and deathy for my taste but if its what you like go 4 it
You shouldn't use such plain words.
If you use different nobody's ever seen before or doesn't see much, it sounds more intresting.
One more thing, it would also be better if YOU WEREN"T SO EMO.
THE LYRICS SOUND ALRIGHT BUT WHAT CATI GORY IS IT IN ? ALTERNATIVE, ROCK,HEAVY METAL OR RAP ?
umm....... its a little depressing and i dont no how to sing it so i give it 2 stars keep trying
Well, if I can listen to the song, then I can check if it fits with the lyric or not.
Sounds like "bad day" of Daniel Powter. The sentence I like most is "nobody knows I'm blind".
Interesting. It would be better if I knew the rhythm it was going to. It does sound like all the other songs in the world. its a cliche. It needs more originality.
It's hard to say without hearing what the music would sound like, that could make a big difference.
Right now it's more like a poem, maybe try posting this question again in the Poetry section?
That said, I think it's a little predictable. But keep trying!
ITS KL KL
it sounds like a really good song. i like it. i'd like to hear how it sounds tho instead of just reading the lyrics. it makes sense too. but what i'm thinking is.... maybe you need to see someone. correct me if i'm wrong, but are you ok? you should talk to someone instead of just holding things in. this is a good song, and if you can do more like it, you could make it far in life. good luck!
***IT COULD USE SOME EDITING, BUT ALL IN ALL, IT'S NOT A BAD POEM. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.***