How bout this??!
Question: k, so i decided not to use the other poem cus it mentions the word gun, not good for school! but the poems supposed to be raw, btw i'm 16:
Trembling knees
beating hearts
staring down at the floor holding my breath.
Your words are knives
lashing out.
Piercing my skin,
but i can't cry out.
All alone i hold the steel,
slicing wounds
that will never heal.
Silent sobs and
weak from pain.
Laying on the tile calling your name.
Finding me,
covered in blood.
You start to scream and
i am gone.
Finding myself in your arms.
A steady ache pulses through
my bones.
Warmth surrounds me.
Pains intense.
Waking up to see...
I am not dead
Answers: k, so i decided not to use the other poem cus it mentions the word gun, not good for school! but the poems supposed to be raw, btw i'm 16:
Trembling knees
beating hearts
staring down at the floor holding my breath.
Your words are knives
lashing out.
Piercing my skin,
but i can't cry out.
All alone i hold the steel,
slicing wounds
that will never heal.
Silent sobs and
weak from pain.
Laying on the tile calling your name.
Finding me,
covered in blood.
You start to scream and
i am gone.
Finding myself in your arms.
A steady ache pulses through
my bones.
Warmth surrounds me.
Pains intense.
Waking up to see...
I am not dead
it's definitely not crap...and i think it's pretty raw...KENMAN gives ya 2 thumbs up!...
it Riley good it sound like something i would write