Just wrote my first acustic song! need reviews?!
Question: Just wrote my first acustic song! need reviews!?
Ok so here is all i got so far i thnk it sounds pretty decent with the guitar!
so just b Honest should i just stop writing!?!?!?
here it is
(starts with guitar intro)
It seems our paths have intertwined
I know im yours and i hope you ll, be mine
i think about the way you look,!.!.!. tonight
this moments' tangled up my mind
"and im tongue tide"
[Guitar plays]
(then i drop back in softly)
because your so
Beautifull
your so beautiful
your so!.!.!.!.Beautifulul
your so!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. (then i fade into the guitar)
so just close your eyes
we can leave this place behind
we'll start a life to live for two
just me and you!.!.
and that it so far
but i dnt want to get all into it and have it suck lolWww@Enter-QA@Com
so just b Honest should i just stop writing!?!?!?
here it is
(starts with guitar intro)
It seems our paths have intertwined
I know im yours and i hope you ll, be mine
i think about the way you look,!.!.!. tonight
this moments' tangled up my mind
"and im tongue tide"
[Guitar plays]
(then i drop back in softly)
because your so
Beautifull
your so beautiful
your so!.!.!.!.Beautifulul
your so!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. (then i fade into the guitar)
so just close your eyes
we can leave this place behind
we'll start a life to live for two
just me and you!.!.
and that it so far
but i dnt want to get all into it and have it suck lolWww@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
Try making a recording of the song and posting it on a site like www!.talenttrove!.com!. You will be able to get much better feedback that way!.
And don't give up, you are off to a great start!Www@Enter-QA@Com
And don't give up, you are off to a great start!Www@Enter-QA@Com
I think it needs more!. It's hard to tell without music and being able to hear it, but it might be good to distinguish stanzas!.
Depending on tempo, this could easily be a 30 second song!.!.!.probably not what you had in mind!.
The idea is good though, perhaps repeat a part or two and add another couple of lines!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
Depending on tempo, this could easily be a 30 second song!.!.!.probably not what you had in mind!.
The idea is good though, perhaps repeat a part or two and add another couple of lines!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
I like it!.
You're off to a good start!.
Is this part vocally written for a boy or girl!?
My only piece of advice is that the chorus (or what I'm assuming is the chorus) is too repetitive!. "You're so beautiful" gets a bit boring to read and most likely hear after a while!.
I'd like to read the whole thing when you're finished (or hear a product!?)
Drop me a message / email / aim!? Www@Enter-QA@Com
You're off to a good start!.
Is this part vocally written for a boy or girl!?
My only piece of advice is that the chorus (or what I'm assuming is the chorus) is too repetitive!. "You're so beautiful" gets a bit boring to read and most likely hear after a while!.
I'd like to read the whole thing when you're finished (or hear a product!?)
Drop me a message / email / aim!? Www@Enter-QA@Com