What do you think of this song I wrote?!


Question: Please give me your whole complete total honest opinion on this song I wrote. I've been writing songs for 3 years and I just wrote this one. Tell me if you like it.

After everything, that you have caused
you expect me come back to you.
Well now give yourself applause.
You always had good ideas.
But honey,mmm hmmm,
I'm not coming back.
After what you did,
I'm sure you still do.
I'd sure enjoy
to let you into my life.
But I just can't take risk.
You always acted like a young boy.
Saying that you'll be good.
Oh but honey what I have ruied.
Oh how it's changing my life.
With all this nonsense
to be cleared.
All this love I gave to you
has sheered.
I brought you into my life,
and now you are out of it so quickly,
in a bllink of eye.
Cause after alll you done,
you might as well just get out!
Sweetie, just leave...
Your smile, could deseive
me, so I'm going to take any chances
around here, till I know what to do
After everything, that you have caused
you expect me come back to you.
Well now give yourself applause.
You always had good ideas.
But honey,mmm hmmm,
I'm not coming back.
mmmmmmm hmmmmm,
I'm not coming back.


Answers: Please give me your whole complete total honest opinion on this song I wrote. I've been writing songs for 3 years and I just wrote this one. Tell me if you like it.

After everything, that you have caused
you expect me come back to you.
Well now give yourself applause.
You always had good ideas.
But honey,mmm hmmm,
I'm not coming back.
After what you did,
I'm sure you still do.
I'd sure enjoy
to let you into my life.
But I just can't take risk.
You always acted like a young boy.
Saying that you'll be good.
Oh but honey what I have ruied.
Oh how it's changing my life.
With all this nonsense
to be cleared.
All this love I gave to you
has sheered.
I brought you into my life,
and now you are out of it so quickly,
in a bllink of eye.
Cause after alll you done,
you might as well just get out!
Sweetie, just leave...
Your smile, could deseive
me, so I'm going to take any chances
around here, till I know what to do
After everything, that you have caused
you expect me come back to you.
Well now give yourself applause.
You always had good ideas.
But honey,mmm hmmm,
I'm not coming back.
mmmmmmm hmmmmm,
I'm not coming back.

I think it sounds like something by Colbie Caillat. I think it's really good, but could use better spelling!
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Not bad, I feel like i've heard it from every other female artist though. Yes, men are a$$holes, we get it.

i think it could use a little more more but it does sound good

its interesting

Work on it a little more it will geat beter it sounds like a letter.

Its really good, but i dont know the rythm (sp?), and if a song doesnt have a good rhythm then it makes it kinda bad...



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