Please give your opinion?!
Question: Horror Show
Hit me like you mean it
And then stare into my face
Laugh while i'm unconscience
Knocked my heart right out of place
It's not what you expected
When you land that final blow
You can't break what is broken
Can't sink lower than this low
Take me while i'm sleeping
Let your fetish be my blood
You'll gain no satisfaction
When i'm face down in the mud
You might as well forget me
Quit the game that can't be won
Sleep away the horror
Make a best friend of a gun.
By: K.M.P "Cut Up Angel"
Answers: Horror Show
Hit me like you mean it
And then stare into my face
Laugh while i'm unconscience
Knocked my heart right out of place
It's not what you expected
When you land that final blow
You can't break what is broken
Can't sink lower than this low
Take me while i'm sleeping
Let your fetish be my blood
You'll gain no satisfaction
When i'm face down in the mud
You might as well forget me
Quit the game that can't be won
Sleep away the horror
Make a best friend of a gun.
By: K.M.P "Cut Up Angel"
Sounds like my feelings during my first marriage.
sounds like your devastated. im sorry. huhuhu
cool
i dont like it..it confusing no point really
wow! its amazin!
seriously, i love it, ur realy good at writing! ide never be able to write anything like that!!!
well done!!
Good lyrics!!!!! Sad and haunting...but very good!! Get out of this relationship if you can!! : )
Sux. Be happy.
a bit cryptic but it rhymes
wow. thats deep
Really Good Keep up the great work although I do think you should make it more rymable
good luck!
You have issues don't you?
Please don't kill youself. That poem is amazing. I wish I could rhyme that well. VERY despcriptive words, imagined it all, and it wasn't a pretty sight. People love you, just ask around.
:) Hang in there. Enter your wonderful poem here http://browse.deviantart.com/literature/... for the rest of the world to read.
this is really good
normally im not into this kind of writing but it shows the emotion that the narrator is showing using descriptive sentences, whcih are very "deep"
It is good, but sounds very dark and like a cry for help. Are you ok? Do you need someone to talk to? please email me if you need a friend. :)
I think you have great talent.
:)
It sounds like you are either a great writer or you really need to talk to someone and get some help....I hope for your sake you are a great writer....
If you can relate to this poem in any way then leave ASAP and don't take your clothes just leave if not then its a very sad poem but true in someones live
it hits home.i can not answer this question,i abstain.just always remember that YOU always have a way out.
I know how you feel but suicide isn't the answer. Don't give them the satisfaction of seeing you gone because this could just be the last life you have think about it what if there is no after life so shouldn't you live the one you know about to the fullest. If you need some one to talk to email me all you have to do is press on my avatar to see my profile and email me and we can talk.
What you had to say is somewhat disheartening, and really makes me feel concern for your health and safety, but the way you said it is really quite nice and was enjoyable to read. I liked your poem, for I know that we sometimes write from imagination as well as experience.
Dondi thinks you're really nice.