COrrect PARagraph?!
Question: HELLO
I need this paragraph for my class but i am not sure if it's good can you please correct any mistakes
- grammer
-you can add sentences
- substitute easy words for hard ones
-change
Not only the soft as carpet grass and never ending sky made them think of only positives on Eden but the apple tree. An apple tree is this truly delicious edible that actually grows on trees.
“ You know that this tastes like when you first bite into it?’ (P.194 Philbrick)
“ It’s apple - flavored!” (p.195 Philbrick)
The apples are red as if they blushed and with rosy cheeks as if they smile. The tree bark felt warm and course, like the skin of a baby. The leaves whisper in the wind, sharing secrets that human ears can’t understand. The delicious apples taste like Eden. Eden is just prefect!
Answers: HELLO
I need this paragraph for my class but i am not sure if it's good can you please correct any mistakes
- grammer
-you can add sentences
- substitute easy words for hard ones
-change
Not only the soft as carpet grass and never ending sky made them think of only positives on Eden but the apple tree. An apple tree is this truly delicious edible that actually grows on trees.
“ You know that this tastes like when you first bite into it?’ (P.194 Philbrick)
“ It’s apple - flavored!” (p.195 Philbrick)
The apples are red as if they blushed and with rosy cheeks as if they smile. The tree bark felt warm and course, like the skin of a baby. The leaves whisper in the wind, sharing secrets that human ears can’t understand. The delicious apples taste like Eden. Eden is just prefect!
LOL
Well grammar and speeling is great. Lots of description!
Personally I would get rid of the last sentance...
lol its a bit cheesy
I hope that kinda helped.. better then the other ppl
hahah thats funny! thats the best joke i've heard in the JOKES & RIDDLES SECTION!!
lrn2sp plox