Is This A good Poem? When you read it none of it is true and also the last sente!
Question: I wake up smell pancakes mother is making them
brown wispy fluffy pancakes and out back i send my dog out to the woods to fish and my favorite swan is gone.
Has my dog ate the swan?Maybe. Hours pass and i come across a book and i open it and my eyes blacken and i wake up with people calling me Green and in my name is green and i have really good gardening skills. So my family has to go on a trip for father and someone has to watch the garden.
So i stay. But in the city a bomb blew and the city went in flames and smoke ashes you couldn't breath. People and children came in and tore up the garden ripped up the food like i wasn't there. So i ran inside so i dont get hurt. From the smoke my eyes were getting blurrie i was going blind. Then i thought i was going into depression so i started smoking. I found ciggerattes in my moms dresser. Then i got black ink and a needle from moms sewing kits. So i start tattooing my self.At the end i do good deeds and my black tattoos turn green.
Answers: I wake up smell pancakes mother is making them
brown wispy fluffy pancakes and out back i send my dog out to the woods to fish and my favorite swan is gone.
Has my dog ate the swan?Maybe. Hours pass and i come across a book and i open it and my eyes blacken and i wake up with people calling me Green and in my name is green and i have really good gardening skills. So my family has to go on a trip for father and someone has to watch the garden.
So i stay. But in the city a bomb blew and the city went in flames and smoke ashes you couldn't breath. People and children came in and tore up the garden ripped up the food like i wasn't there. So i ran inside so i dont get hurt. From the smoke my eyes were getting blurrie i was going blind. Then i thought i was going into depression so i started smoking. I found ciggerattes in my moms dresser. Then i got black ink and a needle from moms sewing kits. So i start tattooing my self.At the end i do good deeds and my black tattoos turn green.
You should turn it into a song.
And write a little more.
I really LOVE it.
Seems *** interesting ***
yes. it sounds good. its verry descriptive. i love how there is allot of describing words in there. it gives the reader a sense as if they were actually there. yes it is a verry good poem.
It's PROSE, not a POEM. But all in all, it reads like either a bad dream or a good acid trip. I've had a lot of both, so I give it 5 stars. Rock on.
wow very good poem this sounds like the ones i read in the book by professional its very good u should submit it to a poem contest imserious ok but anyways if anyone wants to chat go to my profile nad email ok bye thx!
You ask us all if your poem is any good
I'll tell you the truth, like you knew someone should
It is as far away from being a poem
As a spoon would be instead of a comb
The words above would be better suited
For an episode of "Friends" reunited
And Phoebe could sing your creation
As she strummed her guitar, what a sensation!
Coud end up at the top of their list
Making "Smelly Cat" now only 2nd best !!