Please let me know if you like this one or not and why or why not?!
Question: Oh to laugh at the dog who just peed on the electric fence, but be careful it could be you next.
To fall, to cry, even to die, my my, would hurt more to fry.
To be in the wind, on a clear still day, to even keep the cats at bay.
Having spoken and yet not said a word, tis better than slipping on bird turd, cursing its favourite word.
Dog.
Who would catch the birds enemy, cat, in the ghostly fog.
You are my friend to the dog it once said, but be careful where you tred.
Let the cat catch me and you will never get me out of your head.
Oh to live on the farm with only one arm to use or abuse, might be some fun, to some.
To smile, to gag even, tis true is some thing to do.
But tis better when we are all in spirit higher.
Hope you like the words I have written, leaving you now.
Have fun in saddness, sun on a snowy day.
Keeping the real life at bay, so our madness now and then may, if it wishes, stay.
Answers: Oh to laugh at the dog who just peed on the electric fence, but be careful it could be you next.
To fall, to cry, even to die, my my, would hurt more to fry.
To be in the wind, on a clear still day, to even keep the cats at bay.
Having spoken and yet not said a word, tis better than slipping on bird turd, cursing its favourite word.
Dog.
Who would catch the birds enemy, cat, in the ghostly fog.
You are my friend to the dog it once said, but be careful where you tred.
Let the cat catch me and you will never get me out of your head.
Oh to live on the farm with only one arm to use or abuse, might be some fun, to some.
To smile, to gag even, tis true is some thing to do.
But tis better when we are all in spirit higher.
Hope you like the words I have written, leaving you now.
Have fun in saddness, sun on a snowy day.
Keeping the real life at bay, so our madness now and then may, if it wishes, stay.
I actually like that, nice!
i was confused at first, you put it in the category of jokes and riddle and it is not. i liked it though.the use of animals as metaphors and subjects are good. is it a poem of parting or something?
It's a bit confusing. I would try eliminating all unnecessary words and trim it down. For instance Oh to laugh at Do you really need the word Oh. This is the first thing they teachyou in a class. Next. Try to say what you are trying to say without rhyme. in as few words as possible. These are just fun exeercises to try out that will help you see your own wording bette. Good Luck keep writing. I like the ending best the part about madness.
I don't quite get the whole point, but the individual lines/ideas are nice.