How does this story I wrote sound? (NO CUSSIN)?!
Question: How does this story I wrote sound!? (NO CUSSIN)!?
“Now I want you to be nice and polite,” says Miss Closer!. “Especially you, Kamiah!.”
Kamiah presses her face on the car window as we drive along Wicker Street!. I feel sorry for her—our new foster mother, Miss Martini (cool name, huh!?), only wanted me—and then the agency got Kamiah and asked Miss Martini to take her in!.
I hear Miss Martini designed a special room for me!. As I tug on my frayed blue jean skirt, I imagine what she looks like!. Young, tall, lanky—brown, feathery hair, very beautiful!.
Good or bad!?
What should happen!?
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Kamiah presses her face on the car window as we drive along Wicker Street!. I feel sorry for her—our new foster mother, Miss Martini (cool name, huh!?), only wanted me—and then the agency got Kamiah and asked Miss Martini to take her in!.
I hear Miss Martini designed a special room for me!. As I tug on my frayed blue jean skirt, I imagine what she looks like!. Young, tall, lanky—brown, feathery hair, very beautiful!.
Good or bad!?
What should happen!?
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Answers:
It's an extremely descriptive picture! Amazing! I think that Kamiah should have some sort of secret power or something but she's also mute and jean-skirt tries to figure that out er something and bad things start to happen and weird things too (like maybe if you've seen one missed call!?) and Kamiah saves her and Miss Martini gets kidnapped er adult napped and they have to save her except Kamiah refuses to use her powers since she wont even communicate with jeanskirt anymore!. Idk but good luck with your story! You've got a great start!Www@Enter-QA@Com
maybe somethin should happen to the foster mother, and the girl has to fend for herself for a while while she is recovering in the hospitaolWww@Enter-QA@Com
good so far
offer to share the room
or have kamiah lick the window - and get scolded
i dunno, it's your story lolWww@Enter-QA@Com
offer to share the room
or have kamiah lick the window - and get scolded
i dunno, it's your story lolWww@Enter-QA@Com
got to be good with a name like miss martiniWww@Enter-QA@Com
good her name is kinda like mine!.!.!.!.Kamiah!.!.!.!.KamiraWww@Enter-QA@Com
Decent start, could be better!. Have Miss Martini get the blue jean skirt girl her own room and give Kamiah a room in the basement!. Then make Kamiah get possessed and write Satan all over the house!. Maybe a few dead puppies, and you got yourself a great ghost story!.Www@Enter-QA@Com