My 2nd freestyle, whatuthink? battlers welcome, ORIGINALS ONLY!!?!
Question: poisonous reptile son of a bastard child
left in a dungeon tortured with textiles
robbin mcs of their rights to the microphone
underground mc unseen like a unicorn
confused by the scenes in his mind like a new born
you dont want to touch toes
my next foes get beat down
verbally murdered disected from the waist down
mcs try to be killas with a hard frown
never experienced laughter like a failed clown
asimo spit more lines than a railway town
taking out rappers like garbage at sundown
tourists get bruised random rap acts got no use
asimo losing his cool like winter that passed through
breaking the bones of the last few that argue
wakc mcs staying getting flamed more than Barbeque
shooting at adverserys with strength of a cannonball
asimo spitting better flows than a waterfall
while you at home shooting darts at my profile
f*** beef i already consumed a lions share
asimo taking mcs out like a split hair
wack mcs got no effect like a drunk stare....
what u got?....
Answers: poisonous reptile son of a bastard child
left in a dungeon tortured with textiles
robbin mcs of their rights to the microphone
underground mc unseen like a unicorn
confused by the scenes in his mind like a new born
you dont want to touch toes
my next foes get beat down
verbally murdered disected from the waist down
mcs try to be killas with a hard frown
never experienced laughter like a failed clown
asimo spit more lines than a railway town
taking out rappers like garbage at sundown
tourists get bruised random rap acts got no use
asimo losing his cool like winter that passed through
breaking the bones of the last few that argue
wakc mcs staying getting flamed more than Barbeque
shooting at adverserys with strength of a cannonball
asimo spitting better flows than a waterfall
while you at home shooting darts at my profile
f*** beef i already consumed a lions share
asimo taking mcs out like a split hair
wack mcs got no effect like a drunk stare....
what u got?....
try rhyming inside the lines instead of at the end of lines sometimes. it's a good start though. way better than my first rhyme. (and second and third) i think my 4th rhyme beat it though.
"unseen like a unicorn"
that really brought it home for me...
i gots to make room
like a broom
vroom what what
Vroom
dope a.ss ni$$a snitch b!tches
home fo christmas
doggie stylin yo' mamma
take the sand out her brain
put my hotness 'pon da replay
Not bad. It's good but you should loosen up your flow some. It's too confined. This is just positive criticism. Good luck.
It was ok. Keep practicing.
first off that was not a freestyle
you know that you were in your bedroom think extra hard about
if some of your words rhyme or not