What do you think of my dark poem?!
Question: 1- It's a love in one generation.
2- The two of us go to hell.
3- Even though we kill everybody.
4- Signpost for the land of the dead.
5- The rain of blood because of the war.
6- Just like a dead body.
7- My tears run out.
8- A dark night start to melt.
Answers: 1- It's a love in one generation.
2- The two of us go to hell.
3- Even though we kill everybody.
4- Signpost for the land of the dead.
5- The rain of blood because of the war.
6- Just like a dead body.
7- My tears run out.
8- A dark night start to melt.
It sounds like a bunch of lines just put together. If you got it to flow better I'd love it. I write dark poems all the time so take it from me!!! Like... here is a stanza of mine for example:
People say I am vile,
But I still try to smile.
I still life my life,
To everyone else though, it's just a trife.
Maybe if you tried rhyming. Let the words flow to you don't search for the words. Darker poems are the easiest to write too.
i like this...
Very cheerful.
Very dark.....
I would loose the numbers as it breaks the flow of the poem.
Peace.
Your poem has good imagery, but it doesn't flow very well because of your word choice.
Nice job though.
Still trying to digest it, certainly is dark... um okay me likes it!
I think that that was the most BEST poem I have EVER read in my whoe entire life actually! Do you take poem classes, you should! If I had to give you a grade by honesty I would give you 100%! GREAT JOB!