Can you write a worse opening paragraph than this? "Your cheeks are looking!
Question: her mother remarked, setting her embroidery down in her lap the better to observe her daughter. "And your eyes are very bright. I hope you are not coming down with a fever."
Christine laughed. "I have been at the vicarage, playing with the children", she explained. "Alexander wanted to play cricket, but after a few minutes it became clear that Marianne could not catch a ball and Robin could not hit one."
How do these people get published???
Go on, write a worse one, you know you want to....
Answers: her mother remarked, setting her embroidery down in her lap the better to observe her daughter. "And your eyes are very bright. I hope you are not coming down with a fever."
Christine laughed. "I have been at the vicarage, playing with the children", she explained. "Alexander wanted to play cricket, but after a few minutes it became clear that Marianne could not catch a ball and Robin could not hit one."
How do these people get published???
Go on, write a worse one, you know you want to....
that is NOT bad. It's really common to start with dialogue.
*kt*
your cheeks are three and your cracks are two, what in the heck?!?
Yes,
I couldn't even pass English 101.
Her face had the looks of a drained toilet. (Flushed.)
there's no place I'd rather be then right here, with my red neck, white socks and blue ribbon beer.
daddy said my illigitimete saimese twins wheres mommy