Would you please critique my poem?!
Question: This shouldn't defy comprehension,
I do not wish to cause dissension,
My rhyme is just to simply mention
Nothing causes hypertension
Like an undeserved suspension.
Thank you all for your attention.
Answers: This shouldn't defy comprehension,
I do not wish to cause dissension,
My rhyme is just to simply mention
Nothing causes hypertension
Like an undeserved suspension.
Thank you all for your attention.
You're the man.
very well said..........congratulations
lol, I like it
as a published author of 9 poems I feel safe in saying I want to get you an editor
:)~
Love it!!! I'm surprised you didn't work BACON into it somewhere.
And for that ...you get an honorable mention.
...you left out the last line (so bite me).
nice one.
very effective and impressive ryhme scheme...in all short and sweet! well done!
uhh......Yeah....
Your rhyme scheme is working just fine.
It's clearly not your point to whine
but simply point out
not matter what shout
Y!Aers are in health decline.
Excellent! :)
Ode To Bill:
Dearest Bill,
Will you please fill,
My lovely 'dish',
And grant my wish,
That you will stay,
Any always lay,
In my bed,
And I will rub your head.
*Bows to the Master of Brilliance* ...again!
:)
If you havent gotten a bj lately my sister is available
Im sorry i was in the middle of masterbation what did it say