Poetry whats your opinion on my poem ?!


Question: Poetry whats your opinion on my poem !?
When i dream i dream of sorrow,
My dreams are long and dark,
I can hear the sond but never see the color,
My dreams leave me awake some nights thinking,
Some dreams are more of a story,
But all have sarrow and pure sadness,
The trees are dead im the last alive,
All my dreams end the same,
A rock and a bang,
The rock is the earth,
More sorrow then the night before,
My dreams are deep and make me wright things like this,
The more i dream the more i cry,
The more i cry the more i think about my own death,
Will a die at 90 of age or 15 from a gun,
Will the killing ever stop,
Will we ever know how the world ends,
My dreams paint a dark and stormy picture,
My poems paint a clear,
My mind crys of dark things like this,
My hart crys harder and harder,
Between sweet and sour,
I think the end will end sour,
Are we to end in fire or ice,
You chose i would rather end in ice,Www@Enter-QA@Com


Answers:
well I write poems too its my hoppy, I'll be honest and tell u ur poem is good but u have some grammatical errors but its not a big deal thats one,
secondly the poem is really sad , finally u need to work a little on the Rhyme at the end of each line it should be Harmonious with each other

thats all , and I guess u will improve by time, u write good

best of luck to u and have a nice day:)Www@Enter-QA@Com

past the few mistakes its great i would like to know ,however, if the next to last line& the last line are from Robert Frost "Fire And Ice"!?
u should hear some of mine i'm trying 2 work on a web page!. I'll email it 2 you when its done!. keep it up it only gets easier from here!.Www@Enter-QA@Com

scared mindedWww@Enter-QA@Com

i love your poem it sounds like something i would write!!!!

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XxBloody TortureXxWww@Enter-QA@Com

I can see your a glass half full kind of person!.Www@Enter-QA@Com

i like it!.!.!.keep it upWww@Enter-QA@Com



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