Rate my descriptive writing please!!!?!


Question: Rate my descriptive writing please!!!!?
I woke up in the morning and i went on straight to the computer!. So my mum yelled at me for not studying hard enough ( load of bull i study hard i think ) So i sat on my desk and knowning that i had a english homework about descriptive writing, i tried to take in everything i could!. It was raining and i could hear birds and this is how it goes =

Peering through the window, in to the melancholy gray morning, i asked myself not for the first time, why!?
With the rain slowing to a drizzle, i could smell and taste moisture which had seeped through the open window!. The massive tree which towered over the rest seemed full of life!. Birds tweaked away happily for they were safe!. Covered and protected by the gigantic branches, they chatted away!. Cars sped through the lifeless street one then a few minutes later, another, the third just as unpredictable as the latter!. There was no rhythm in life!.
I blankly put my jacket on, and without a goodbye, or a hello, i stepped outside!. The rain had nearly stopped now!. Two only good things about this morning - happy birds and the rain stopping!. Raindrops fell from the trees as i walked, uncertain where i was going, and dug it's way into the my flesh!. But i had made up something in my mind long before i even stpped outisde - I would not come back without the answer to my question - why!?

Please be honest and if its bad, say that it is but with details and explanations so i may improve!. If its good then give me tips and encouragements so i may write more thank you!!!!>>>
Out of 10!.Www@Enter-QA@Com


Answers:
Its descriptive and pretty but its incomplete!.!.!. its just a moment in time, carry it on, answer a question, tell a story, or make the reader question "why!?" too!. Give us a reason to be interested, tell us why you are questioning life!. Its a good start!.Www@Enter-QA@Com

8 i suppose if it follows yer teachers criteria



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mine!?!?Www@Enter-QA@Com

I loved it!. You could write a book if you expanded your writing a little more! I'm not giving you a 10, I'm giving you 1000Www@Enter-QA@Com



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