What do you think of this story so far (you don't have to read it all)?!


Question: What do you think of this story so far (you don't have to read it all)!?
my 12 year old sister wrote it and i like the idea of it i dunno im not a book critic (you don't have to read the whole thing just enought to get an idea)


Skyla sat in her part of the hut she shared with her brother in the small village of Baren!. It was a cold bleak day like something had sucked up all the color and joy in the world!. Skyla had just turned fifteen the past summer, but for her there was almost no celebration!. She gazed to the corner of her room to the bow she prized so much, it had been a gift from her mom before she died!. Skyla was twelve when it happend, her mother was found walking alone in the forest by the Argons a blood thirsty group of brutes!. She had walked in on them dragging her mother away only able to escape detection by dodging from tree to tree!. She never saw her mother again!. She and her brother never met her father and her mom didn't like to talk about him!. Her brother Soren walked in disturbing her thoughts!."Skyla" he said looking annoyed!. “What is it!?"She asked!."We are running low on meat I need you to go out hunting, you know I hurt my back in the fields so I’m no good with a bow, besides you're a better hunter!.""How much do we need!?"She said still half trapped in her dreams!. Getting annoyed he answered "Enough to last us for about a week to a month, just get as much as you can hunt, or carry!. How long will you be gone!?" "About three days, maybe four if the hunting is poor, I’ll leave as soon as I finish packing!."
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Skyla walked towards the forest with her pack full of supplies!. She liked it out
Here because of the calmness even though she had lost her mother in the very
Same forest!. She felt different this trip though!. Almost as if something strange would soon happen!. She quickly pushed aside that thought not wanting to scare herself, thus having to endure soren's taunghts!.The forest was on the side of a giant mountain range called the Athens after a boy named Athren who was now
Sixteen, but he was diffrent!.He had eyes so dark and full of hate they made grown men shudder, and also he was a dragon rider!. His dragon was the deepest black, almost like night itself!. His name was shurikan but he had eyes blue and pale like the sky, which gave him a gentler look even though he ended many lives!. The trek was hard and long, she was in good shape though because she always way out exploring!. Sometimes she felt she was being watched and then she would remember the stories from the people in the village!. They said that Athren himself lurked in the mountain which is why the mountains were feared by the villagers she stumbled all of a sudden on something she hadn’t seen!. She looked down and she almost turned back because she had tripped on a place where the dirt was ripped up by what looked like giant claws!. Up ahead there was a pile of trees all torn up and some scorched and she couldn’t help but think of shurikan and Athren!. She was almost to the hunting grounds maybe about noon tomorrow she would reach it!. She pressed onwards pondering things till it was near midnight and the moon was high in the sky!.

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Wow, well for a TWELVE year old that's pretty amazing
I know 11th graders that can't even right this well [or spell that well for that matter lol]Www@Enter-QA@Com



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