Can i get your honest opinion on my song?!
Question: Drip
Drip, drip, drip
I sigh as i see the rain fall
Drip,drip drip
My tears are rolling down my face
Memoires flood my mind
Your face enters my thoughts
I start crying harder
I wish you were by my side
Drip, drip, drip
The rain starts falling harder
Drip, drip, drip
I can't stand the pain anymore
I remember your voice
So smooth and so carring
I wanna hear you say you still love me
Please that's all i want
It's pouring outside
My tears are rushing down my face
I'm freezing in my room
I want you to hold me
I feel so stupid
I shouldn't have ended it
It was one of the biggest mistakes in my life
I wish i didn't do it
Drip, drip, drip
The rain is thundering down
Drip, drip, drip
Blood is falling from my wrist
The blood runs down my hand
Puddles form around the floor
I feel much better
I slit my other wrist
Drip, drip, drip
My hands are drenched in blood
Drip, drip, drip
The floor is red around my feet
Answers: Drip
Drip, drip, drip
I sigh as i see the rain fall
Drip,drip drip
My tears are rolling down my face
Memoires flood my mind
Your face enters my thoughts
I start crying harder
I wish you were by my side
Drip, drip, drip
The rain starts falling harder
Drip, drip, drip
I can't stand the pain anymore
I remember your voice
So smooth and so carring
I wanna hear you say you still love me
Please that's all i want
It's pouring outside
My tears are rushing down my face
I'm freezing in my room
I want you to hold me
I feel so stupid
I shouldn't have ended it
It was one of the biggest mistakes in my life
I wish i didn't do it
Drip, drip, drip
The rain is thundering down
Drip, drip, drip
Blood is falling from my wrist
The blood runs down my hand
Puddles form around the floor
I feel much better
I slit my other wrist
Drip, drip, drip
My hands are drenched in blood
Drip, drip, drip
The floor is red around my feet
dude, i love it!
thats like my style too..who cares what others say if its too dark. look at three days grace and trapt..ha
:)
i'd love to hear it..
Um... It's very depressing and a bit too much dripping. The wrist slitting is also very disturbing.
No rhyming either. All great songs rhyme!
it would depend on the style of song i guess
but its a good poem, song, probably
I think it's beautiful
Umm... It doesnt rhyme
it sounds emoish and depessing
That Rocked!
ummm. as a fellow lyricist and a bandmember who has gotten a few albums out. i really dont think that is meant for music. To much repeating of dripping, and you use a lot of regular words. you need to use phrases that mean other things. An example from a nirvana song: its ok to eat fish. this means that its ok to eat fish because they cant feel anything. this refers to a time when kurt cobain couldnt feel anything because his life was so messed up. see how e get from one line to an entire different meaning. and also there is no rythm. and one more thing it is VERY long. I think it is a good poem that has a possibility of being published
too simple. lots of people can write about cutting their wrist and they do it much better. not that i like people cutting...
don't say drip drip that much try replacing it by something else other wise nice song