What do you think of these lyrics? (That I wrote)?!
Question: What do you think of these lyrics!? (That I wrote)!?
What do you think of this short song that I wrote for, um, a guy!? lol =)
MY DESIRE
[Intro]
I’ve been meaning to tell you this,
But I never did,
And now my chance has come n’gone,
So I’ma tell you now… I hope you’ll understand…
You don’t know what you meant to me,
Those times when you talked to me!.
N now that I don’t see you any more,
I want you even more then before!.
N’ every night and day,
Is this how I will stay!?
[Chorus]
You’re everything I desire,
You’re the one I aspire (the one I admire)
And everything I ever want is you
This is sad (I know), but it’s true
That I need you (my baby boo)!.
You’re in my dreams (every single night)
Though I know no dream can compare to the real you!.
You’re caught up in my mind and I
Don’t think I can ever stop wanting you
Why are you making me feel so (ugh)
Just by the way you talk and look!.
I guess I’ve learned my lesson the hard way,
Shoulda talked to you when I had the chance!.
Now I realize you’re all that I want (And all that I need)
Cuz…
[Chorus x2]
You’re everything I desire,
You’re the one I aspire (the one I admire)
And everything I ever want is you
This is sad (I know), but it’s true
That I need you (my baby boo)!.
[Whispery voice]
Hey, maybe we can work this out!. I know it’s not the end cuz every end has a new beginning!.
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MY DESIRE
[Intro]
I’ve been meaning to tell you this,
But I never did,
And now my chance has come n’gone,
So I’ma tell you now… I hope you’ll understand…
You don’t know what you meant to me,
Those times when you talked to me!.
N now that I don’t see you any more,
I want you even more then before!.
N’ every night and day,
Is this how I will stay!?
[Chorus]
You’re everything I desire,
You’re the one I aspire (the one I admire)
And everything I ever want is you
This is sad (I know), but it’s true
That I need you (my baby boo)!.
You’re in my dreams (every single night)
Though I know no dream can compare to the real you!.
You’re caught up in my mind and I
Don’t think I can ever stop wanting you
Why are you making me feel so (ugh)
Just by the way you talk and look!.
I guess I’ve learned my lesson the hard way,
Shoulda talked to you when I had the chance!.
Now I realize you’re all that I want (And all that I need)
Cuz…
[Chorus x2]
You’re everything I desire,
You’re the one I aspire (the one I admire)
And everything I ever want is you
This is sad (I know), but it’s true
That I need you (my baby boo)!.
[Whispery voice]
Hey, maybe we can work this out!. I know it’s not the end cuz every end has a new beginning!.
Www@Enter-QA@Com
Answers:
wow looks like u put a lot of efort into that song! it has a lot of meaning a thought put in to it!. u have a realy gift and u need to put it out there for everyone to see!. that song is awesome and to hear someone actually sing it would be soo cool!. keep going with writing music and one day it will all pay off!Www@Enter-QA@Com
This is actually really good, but I think for the whole song, it'd depend on the melody as well!. Apart from that, these lyrics look really good!.Www@Enter-QA@Com
sounds like a pop songWww@Enter-QA@Com
that song rules man keep goin u could be famouse soonWww@Enter-QA@Com
wow i love that, thats like me!. i just moved away from the guy i like!. =(Www@Enter-QA@Com
It is very nice!. Just revise it and change a few things and it will be almost perfect!Www@Enter-QA@Com