What do you think of this? PLEASE ANSWER?!
Question: back then i didn't know
i didn't know how much you mean to me
but these feelings grow....oh how they grow
it was amazing the fisrt time i layed eyes on you
i know i had to talk to you
i know their was something i felt
i wish.....i wish
that this feeling would go
but then life would go too
this feeling is trapped inside
like a genie in a bottle
only thing to sit it free is you
you saying those magical words
but now my tears weep for you
when i close my eyes i see you
ny heart beats faster when something reminds me of you
these feeling i hate
they are driving me crazy
and it's killing me inside
knowing we can't be
and knowing how much i truly....
truly care for you and love you
Answers: back then i didn't know
i didn't know how much you mean to me
but these feelings grow....oh how they grow
it was amazing the fisrt time i layed eyes on you
i know i had to talk to you
i know their was something i felt
i wish.....i wish
that this feeling would go
but then life would go too
this feeling is trapped inside
like a genie in a bottle
only thing to sit it free is you
you saying those magical words
but now my tears weep for you
when i close my eyes i see you
ny heart beats faster when something reminds me of you
these feeling i hate
they are driving me crazy
and it's killing me inside
knowing we can't be
and knowing how much i truly....
truly care for you and love you
I hate links in questions to a question but I thought I'd check this one out and be nasty. How could I??
This was well worth my time I loved it. If you do this at 14 keep it up and I wouldn't doubt if you will get published someday.
Thats great. I really like it :)
it was ok
i love it! did u write it?? my only critique is that genie part it scares me i'd take it out...
AWWWWWWWWWW you love/like someone..
that's cutew and plus i like the poem.
but still....
awwwww!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Beatiful lol! I luved it, it was great! =))
oh wow i love it!!! that is really good... the genie in a bottle part though made me want to start singing that song..
pretty good. i like it.
what do i think? i think i am sick of seeing the links to it on other peoples questions.
Sad, but totally great hun.....i mean that. :)
tht waz really great!!!!!! u wrote tht?????? it waz awesome!!!! like get it published or sumthng!!!!!!!!!! r u writer????
wow. really touching.
:D
i like the part, "this feeling is trapped inside
like a genie in a bottle
only thing to sit it free is you
you saying those magical words
but now my tears weep for you
when i close my eyes i see you
ny heart beats faster when something reminds me of you"
whoa. thats like....whoa. :D
awsome....... so good
You made me think of when I first started writing. That's a good thing! When you're young and discovering love, things are raw and real and I think as we get older we tend to dress things up with all the new words we've learned. Thanks for sharing this with us. I think that if I had access to the internet at your age, I wouldn't have had the guts to put it out for others to see and judge. Kudos to you on both fronts!
(((hugs)))
Dawna
its iiight better then anything i could do!!
i luv it gonna send it to everyone on hotmail
Awsome ^_^
i like the genie Part !
R U ready
Babes i met u just this minute
I really felt it you just giveth
The writing on the wall
It just says it all
Yesterday was just a blur
today reminds me of the war
I am getting older every day
The news we hear is just a wonder
Made by those who are boy blunders
how do you wish me to proceed?
The last few years have been a mess
I am waiting to be blessed
I am only a shell of a man
Singing bye bye I am a UK guy
I wish for the us before i die
I have a home i wish to buy
singing this will be the way that i die
oh yes till i retire i will fly
Is this any good?
really good man i lyke that
it was okaaay..you should use bigger words, it would make it sound less cheesy.
WOW thats really sweet who are you! u should be a poet any gurl would be lucky to have you!!!!!!!
Awwww! That is soooo cute. =] I wish you were writing that to me! It was really good!
=]
You remind me of Romeo!
aww bless
hmmmm....sounds depressing.....i like it!!! would you mind if i played a re-write of this song in my future band